Moriah Leila

You talk about how when she uses it, it leaves an inky stain. Perhaps in the process of getting ready for college she performs some magic and worries over the ...

This won't really count as a review, because I think the changes you made were wonderful! Your sensory language is great! Good job.

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I don't think I have ever laughed at a poem before. That was pure genius. I can't wait to read more of your work.

Well I for one think Burger King tastes way better than McDonalds and Wendys. I agree with Nate, you should make this into a pointless story like Jay and Silent ...

Yes I think this is greatly improved. It makes a lot more sense, and I think you have rectified the pattern/rhyme. My only critique at this point is your punctuation. ...

Good job! I am very impressed at the quality of your poetry at such a young age. I think you should expand on this poem. Maybe talk about other things ...

Lol, yeah I caught that in my draft, but forgot to change it here on YWS. Thanks Cassie!

I am back, as promised. So let's get back to where I left off. “Why the pleasure of mine, of course!” The Hillsman laughed. I think you meant to say ...

I didn't get a chance to read what everyone else wrote, so you'll have to forgive me if I repeat something that has already been covered. Shall we? People never ...

Here we go, last part... I couldn’t help smiling as I realized I’d covered almost a third of San Pedro, on foot, in a matter of hours between early this ...

Sorry about the delay, settling into a new home is so hectic. The stinks of the garbage mingled with the harsh feel of the asphalt beneath me. You are such ...

I didn't get a chance to read the other reviews, so hopefully I don't repeat anything. Vashoa started back to the old, ramshackle farmhouse where she dwelt with her ma ...

Sorry it took me so long to get back to you. But now I am here and I am ready to rip this piece to shreds. (If you don't mind.) ...

That itself wasn’t a surprise, only that they hadn’t yet caught or cornered me. That was about to change, I decided as I took a weary look down the short ...